Shakkar Gir Gayi - ek nazm

by **Bhirr Ustaad** » Sat Jul 20, 2002 6:14 am

Tamaam bhaiyouN BehnouN ko AadaaB aur Salaam Arz hai, Dil ke khoon sey haalaat-e-hazira pey ek Nazm likkhi hai..so suna raha hooN.
 .Shakkar 

Yeh Kya awaaz thi 
Kya Giraa koi khilouna hai 
jo dekha maa ney poorey farsh per 
shakkar bicahuna hai 
laraz kar boli woh 
yeh kya kiya aye besharam tuney 
mana karney pe na sun-ney ki kya 
khayi qasam tuney . 

woh boli jaa yahan sey 
mai nahin ab tujh se bolungi 
ke jab tak tuu na sudhrega 
mai apna muNh na kholungi . 
Thaa apney khel mein Anjaan 
Ajab ek aag si lapki 
Ke jab kuch bhediyouN 
ke muNh ajab ek raal si tapki . 

ajab kuttouN ki toli thi 
hawas ka naach nanga tha 
hawas key pairahan ko sab ney 
ek mazhab se ranga thaa 
Ke aansoo ruk chukey they 
aur nidhaal aawaz uski thi 
magar masoom hoNtoun pey 
faqat ik baat uski thi . 

teri har baat ka ammi 
bharam ab mai rakhoonga 
mai shakkar zindagi bhar ammi merii 
hargiz na chakkhounga 
sirhaney kab sey baithaa hoon 
zara sa aankh kholo tum. 
Qasam Allah ki tumko hai ammi 
ab to bolo tum ..

by **afz** » Sat Jul 20, 2002 8:32 pm

Birr Ustad kahan se to bhi larain yaro ye sab masala. Mgr acchi lagi nazm

by **Bhaimiya** » Sat Jul 20, 2002 9:18 pm

afz: kaan sey toh bhi layengey bhai Bhirr Ustaad apney deemag sey larien, deemag mein khiyyal ubharta woh phoran usko kagaz pey likh letey aur phir yahan board pey post kardetey. Wesey kya kheney Bhirr Ustaad aur aakhri lines \"Sirhaney kab sey baithaa hoon zara sa aankh kholo tum. Qasam Allah ki tumko hai ammi ab to bolo tum\" - bahut khoob.

by **Bhai** » Sat Jul 20, 2002 9:31 pm

wah bhai wah kya nazm likhi, seeha dil ko ja ko lagi.

by **Udhas** » Sat Jul 20, 2002 10:33 pm

Aain yeh Bhirr Ustaad, afz aur bhai ekiech toh nahi hey, kuch kuch shak hora mujhey.

by **Radha** » Sat Jul 20, 2002 11:28 pm

baapu ne kahaa tha mujse, ek roz saweraa hogaa,
honge hum bhi aazaad aur ek nayaa baseraa hogaa,
mein is sapne mein jhoomkar sogayi maan taan kar,
ek shor utah tho aank khuli, dekha baahar jhaank kar,
raam rahim lad rahai they, apne ghar ko baant kar,
maine soncha khwaab hai, soyi man ko shaant kar,

ek shor utah tho aank khuli soncha aaya hai sawera,
daud ke bhaagi bahaar ko tho baaher tha andhera,
shor mein jaane bhatak gaya kab, chhuut gaya ghar mera,
pandit bola idhar ko aao, mullah bola tu hai mera,

phir main bhaagi Maan ko dhoondne gali gali nagar nagar,
pahuncha uttar desh ko mein, jisme hai ayodhya nagar,

maan meri wahaan ro rahi thi, jaise kuch woh kho rahi thi,
yug yug puraani uski aabroo, jaise ab woh lut rahi thi,

kali kali masal rahe they, khud hi ab chamanzaar,
kal tak mere dost they jo bhi aaj bangaye aghyaar,

mein bhaagi baapu ke des gujraat kehte hain jisko,
baapu mere yahin kahin tha, use milna hai mujhko,
woh bole ye paagal hai, thodi samajh nahi isko,
dhoondne nikli hai baapu ko, ye kalyug hai samjhaao isko,

maine dekha baapu ko beech raah mein jalte hue,
ravaan ki sena maar rahi thi, usko hanste khelte hue,
meri maan bhi wahin khadi, uski abru lut chuki thi,
meri behan thi ab widhwa, meri naani jal chuki thi,
chote bacche bilakh rahe they masoom bacchi jal rahi thi,
jaane kitne yug yug se aisi nafrat pal rahi thi,

main bhaagi baapu ki aur, par woh pura jal chukaa tha,
ab mein samjha woh sawera, woh basera sab jhutaa tha

by **Radha** » Sat Jul 20, 2002 11:33 pm

Bahut khuuuuuuuuuuuuub Bhirr Ustaad, Aap ne hamey rula diya.

by **Bhirr Ustaad** » Sun Jul 21, 2002 2:17 am

Salam Bhai,

Nazm pasand farmaney kaa shukriyaa...aur zara wazahat kardijiye .......hamarey udhas bhai kuch udaasi ke shikaar hai, unko hamari shaqsiyat ke judaa honey par shak hai.
Ek baar phir shukriyaa

by **Bhirr Ustaad** » Sun Jul 21, 2002 2:22 am

Salamalikum Radha,

Aap ko Nazm acchi lagee sun kar khushi hui, aapki nazm bhi padhi aapke jazbaat ki aapney ismeiN bakhoobi akkasi kee hai. Isllah karney ke qaabil to mai khud nahin (apni khud ki nazm mein do ghaltiyaan yahan post karney ke baad nazar aayi) lekin thoda sa wazan ka khayaal rakheiN to accha likh
sakti hai, aap mein fan-e-takhayyul to mashaAllah hai fan-e-taghazzul ko thoda mashq se sanwaar lein to kya baat hogi.

by **Bhirr Ustaad** » Sun Jul 21, 2002 2:25 am

Bhaimiyaa aapku nazm pasand aayi to mehnat cheez hogai samjho...khair yeh khayaal bohot dinoun sey zehn mey bechain kar raha tha bil-aakhir nazm ki shakl mein bahaar aa gaya.hausla afzahi ka shukriyaa.

by **Bhirr_Ustaad** » Sun Jul 21, 2002 2:27 am

Udhas Bhai -- salam --apaka address diye to hamlogaN zara passport ke kaapiyaN bhejdete aapku tasalli ke wastey.lol

by **Bhaimiya** » Sun Jul 21, 2002 1:32 pm

Bahot khoob Radha.

by **afz** » Sun Jul 21, 2002 4:37 pm

aree bhai Bhirr Ustaad alag main alag mera tarruf nahin karaya isliye problem hora aplogaon ko mera nam afzal siddiqui hai main saudi arab main kam kar raha hoon. Greeb hyd se taluk rakhta hai. allah hafiz

by **Bhaimiya** » Sun Jul 21, 2002 8:48 pm

Afzal bhai: Welcome to the club. Aap Saudi mein kis sheher mein kam kar rahey hein?

by **Radha** » Sun Jul 21, 2002 10:35 pm

Walaikum as salaam,Bhirr Ustaad, Shukriya aap ki himmat afzai ka, aap sach kehte hain, main yahan par hun aur yahan par isllah karna toh chod shaukeen loag bhi nazar nahi aate, inshallah chutti par ja rahi hun agle hafte aur saari ghazlein and nazmein apne ustaad Dr.Ali Ahmed Jaleeli se isllah karaongi. Jab tak bardasht keejiye.

by **Radha** » Sun Jul 21, 2002 10:37 pm

Bahut,bahut shukriya bhaimiya.

by **afz** » Mon Jul 22, 2002 12:06 pm

Main DAMMAM se 160 km door AL AHSA (HOFUF) main kam kar raha hoon. AL- MULHIM AIR CONDITIONING main as CAD OPERATOR hoon aur kya aap bhi saudi main hi hain.

by **Bhaimiya** » Mon Jul 22, 2002 1:52 pm

Hou Afazal bhai mein bhi yaiench Saudi Arab, Riyadh mein rehton dekho. Aapsey aadhee mulakat karkey (yaani posting key zariye) bhadee khushi huwee aur umeed hey key aapko bhi mujhsey mulakat kareky khushi howee hogee. Fakht aapka Bhaimiya.

by **afzal siddiqui** » Tue Jul 23, 2002 1:32 pm

Bhai Miyan Riyadh main kidhar rahtain hain. aap se bhi milkar mujhe khushi hogi aap ka tel no. kya hai mera tel. 03-587700 hai inshalla phone per milenge waise main riyadh main 2 saal kam kiya hoon Batha 5 building ke kareeb rahta tha khair!

by **Bhaimiya** » Tue Jul 23, 2002 4:06 pm

Afzal bhai: Shukriya phone number deney ka magar ek number ki aap dhandi mardiye, telephone number 7 digits hotien aur aap 6 number diye. Mein Riyadh mein Chamber of Commerce key khareeb rehta hoon.

by **afzal** » Tue Jul 23, 2002 9:01 pm

Bhai Miyan dandy nahi typing mistake hai 03- 5877000 aur aap ne no. nahin diyee. allah hafiz

by **Bhaimiya** » Tue Jul 23, 2002 9:18 pm

Afzal bhai: Mein toh mazak kiya tha aap bhura mangaye aur mujhey pata tha yeh typo hey. Inshallah mein kabhi aap sey baat karoonga aur aapko merey ghar ka number dunga, agar office ka number diya toh koyee bhee Bhaimiya ko nahi pehchangeyga!lol.

by **afzal** » Wed Jul 24, 2002 12:57 pm

Bhai Miyan sukhriya jawab dena. Jaise hi fursat mile phone no deen. allah hafiz

by **afzal** » Thu Jul 25, 2002 1:21 pm

Bhai miyan sab loog kidhar hain.

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